Comments on: Pages 74-75

By: Denise

Denise — Thu, 19 May 2011 17:48:06 +0000

ha! pretty lights >.<

By: butterflied412

butterflied412 — Wed, 09 Feb 2011 03:57:49 +0000

The mom in the rat seem to have gone a little simple minded…by the way…how does the lizard brain fit in the rat head anyway!?

By: Philsip

Philsip — Mon, 02 Aug 2010 21:19:47 +0000

I definitely agree. “Show, don’t tell.” I was definitely curious as to how the suit would be made to fit Victuals, and I was somewhat disappointed to simply be told that it worked out.

By: Cousac

Cousac — Fri, 30 Jul 2010 18:48:01 +0000

gah! i vant more! Your art is truly amazing. so i'm adding this to my growing list of comic feeds :) not an easy list to get on either.

By: Mr. Average

Mr. Average — Thu, 29 Jul 2010 09:43:05 +0000

If I may venture a mild critique, it seems to me that there are really about four pages of story missing between page 73 and 74. Swallowing up that action and the concomitant passage of time in a voiceover is jarring. There are days of tinkering, first and second tries (perhaps with the suit going wrong the first time), and Sonja convincing Victuals that he really should go back to face "the site of his disgrace." Not to mention the triumphant reveal, of Victuals wearing the working suit for the first time, making some kind of a revelatory remark like "How do I look?" The visual elements on both ends are so strong that they seem to be bookending a really dramatic scene, but it isn't there. There's a real bounty of visual storytelling I can imagine going there that isn't happening, and it jars the flow of the story events out of the nice, flowing sequence they've had so far. Were I you, I'd seriously consider revisiting that – and frankly, it would not mean scrapping anything – the pages 73-74 as they are would frame such a sequence extremely well.

Voiceovers are a hard sell in comics. A lot of times they can break things down more than I would consider appropriate for the medium – I've been forcing myself not to use them, lately, for that very reason. It's the difference between saying "A lot of time passed," and showing the time passing, with vingettes, fluid page sequences, etc. I think the latter would serve this particular chapter very well.

–M

By: Jason Brubaker

Jason Brubaker — Tue, 27 Jul 2010 16:52:42 +0000

Great meeting you too! Your site/comics are great looking! I've put my name on the waiting list for a Small Press table next year at SDCC so we will see what happens. I don't have anything really planned out yet for other conventions but I'll keep in touch as I move forward. My book should be coming out around June of 2011 so I wont be exhibiting anywhere before that. Thanks for stopping by my site!

By: Jason Brubaker

Jason Brubaker — Tue, 27 Jul 2010 16:37:24 +0000

Okay, I just started a poll on the left hand side of the page. If I get enough interest then I'll move forward on this idea. Glad you guys suggested it!

By: il biggo

il biggo — Tue, 27 Jul 2010 15:30:41 +0000

Thanks! Now I just need some free time .-D

By: Jules

Jules — Tue, 27 Jul 2010 11:10:47 +0000

Jason, I am so glad I ran into you at SDCC. We met briefly on Thursday in front of the Sarah Ellerton signing at Keenspot. I had no idea this comic of yours was so amazing. I'd like to keep in touch for the future and if you're interested in splitting a table or a booth at future CA cons, I'm game. It was a pleasure to meet you.

By: SpiroExDeus

SpiroExDeus — Tue, 27 Jul 2010 10:08:31 +0000

You could always go the Cafépress route cafepress.com. Will be where I'm selling my T-shirts when I have got my concentration level to above that of a small goldfish…