saaad :( poor Victuals lost faith… I'm sympathetic :(
then, not than (in "than what's your name). I'm also suspicious of "my past is no longer" – shouldn't it have "important" at the end? Or is this just "ancient talk"? :) I'm not a native speaker either :D
Yeah, it should be ‘then’, not ‘than’. But, ‘my past is no longer’ can also mean ‘my past no longer exists’…it’s an archaic grammar form, but it works. @Bastet – Good job on spotting the ‘than’, though – I didn’t even notice until you pointed it out!
And Mr. Brubaker, I just wanted to let you know that this comic – the story, the art, everything – is fantastic, and I can’t wait until it’s in book-form so I can buy it and keep it close to me always. ALWAYS.
Indeed, I also did not notice the 'than' (it usually bothers me to see such mistakes).
For the "my past is no longer" part, I would probably opt for "my past is no more" myself, though I think this is still viable.
I was wondering about the "trapped our consciousness to host bodies" part though. Should it not be "trapped in " ?
Just to mention: I got redirected to this comic through Sarah Ellerton's The Phoenix Requiem (a couple weeks back when she posted about it). And I should like to thank both her, and you, for delivering such splendid work! (And also for passing word around about each other, else I would have never ended up here!)
So Thank you. Both.
Ps. your post about the Online vs Print Publishing, though informative!, also contained some spelling errors; spotted a few "your" -> "you're" mistakes for instance. But spelling there is not at the top of your list I presume.
I agree that "to host bodies" should be "in host bodies." And should "consciousness" in that same phrase not be plural — consciousnesses? It's referring to more than one of them, after all.
Again, superb work on the lighting and the arrangement of the panels. This comic is very visually pleasing.
On June 14 I went through the comic from beginning to this point, and dropped a couple dozen comments on English usage problems. (I tried to avoid duplicating other people's finds, but a few got through.) But the only comments of mine that got released were the two above, on this page. Was I supposed to put the comments on the current page? I put all the comments on the page that they were relevant to, except for the one page that was comment-locked.
Hey Dan, Yeah sorry about that. For some reason your comments were moved to my spam folder in WordPress. Every now and then I check it and find someone like yourself who isn't trying to sell drugs on my blog. haha
I think the spam folder dumps everything every week so your old comments might have been trashed on accident. Sorry again. Another one of my loyal followers comments never get through for for some reason.
I forgot about the page that was locked too. I'll go unlock it now before I forget again.
Just so you know, I just sent all my pages to an editor that is going to address all the notes and make some of his own so hopefully before to long all the pages will be updated and all the editing can finally end.
I really appreciate you sticking with it even thought my blogs been giving you a hard time!
I think one thing that helps comments go though easier is if it has an email address attached to it that is a dependable source like gmail or something. Sometimes if there's no email, it questions if the comment is spam or not.
"Victuals" is the origin (eye word) word of "vittles" which became an "ear word" (people learned it by hearing other people using it, rather than by reading it in print.) And like anything learned by ear, the pronunciation tends to drift. "Victuals" would be pronounced "VICK-chools" or "VICK-chu-alls" — I think you should continue to spell the name as "Victuals" because "Vittles" is too easily associated with the cat food "Tender Vittles" and I don't think you want to go there. "Victuals" gives the character a uniqueness and an identity of his own not associated with anything. I think that's what you're aiming at.
Also, thought you'd like to know, I found your GN by following a link from the voting page on TWC. I was voting for Fey Winds, saw the link, looked interesting and here I am. I love your artwork. It has an "ink on newsprint" look I like, like the classic comic book format — slick cover, newsprint pages. It also has a kind of water color feel to it too, which I find attractive. Seeing as how I have three kitties myself, a story with a cat in it catches my attention.
I was on the right track, the pets are being used as vessels for the lizards souls. I hope they are co-habitating…the pets have souls too you know…or did those souls “move on” so these souls could take over the bodies? I know, I’m getting deep;)
saaad :( poor Victuals lost faith… I'm sympathetic :(
then, not than (in "than what's your name). I'm also suspicious of "my past is no longer" – shouldn't it have "important" at the end? Or is this just "ancient talk"? :) I'm not a native speaker either :D
Cool thanks for pointing that out. I just updated “then”.
The light hitting her hair is really beautiful.
I love where this is going!! Great frames my friend!
I love the water in the wave of the top panel- Also a big congrats on the grant! I think you are on the right path man
Yeah, it should be ‘then’, not ‘than’. But, ‘my past is no longer’ can also mean ‘my past no longer exists’…it’s an archaic grammar form, but it works. @Bastet – Good job on spotting the ‘than’, though – I didn’t even notice until you pointed it out!
And Mr. Brubaker, I just wanted to let you know that this comic – the story, the art, everything – is fantastic, and I can’t wait until it’s in book-form so I can buy it and keep it close to me always. ALWAYS.
Seriously though, good job.
Very cool story and great art!
Awwww, poor Victuals, I feel so bad for him… Can't wait to meet his mom though. That aught to be interesting. ^^
Art is awesome as usual. Keep up the good work, and congrats on the grant!
Indeed, I also did not notice the 'than' (it usually bothers me to see such mistakes).
For the "my past is no longer" part, I would probably opt for "my past is no more" myself, though I think this is still viable.
I was wondering about the "trapped our consciousness to host bodies" part though. Should it not be "trapped in " ?
Just to mention: I got redirected to this comic through Sarah Ellerton's The Phoenix Requiem (a couple weeks back when she posted about it). And I should like to thank both her, and you, for delivering such splendid work! (And also for passing word around about each other, else I would have never ended up here!)
So Thank you. Both.
Ps. your post about the Online vs Print Publishing, though informative!, also contained some spelling errors; spotted a few "your" -> "you're" mistakes for instance. But spelling there is not at the top of your list I presume.
Thanks, The "your" and "you're" mistake is hopefully addressed and I'm consciously keeping an eye out for that one now. Thanks for bringing it up.
Should be "trapped in" host bodies, yes, but I also think it should be "consciousnesses".
Anyhow, this is the best thing I've read in a long time, and I gobbled it up to pp62-63 all at once. Now the long slow reading begins….
I agree that "to host bodies" should be "in host bodies." And should "consciousness" in that same phrase not be plural — consciousnesses? It's referring to more than one of them, after all.
Again, superb work on the lighting and the arrangement of the panels. This comic is very visually pleasing.
Consciousnesses just sounds to funny to me. What if I change it to "souls"? It sounds a bit more creepy but I think it still works.
Yeah, I'd buy that. And I see that you've already made the change, as well. :) The flow is much improved, I think.
here via The Meek–wow. LOVE this. Great work!
On June 14 I went through the comic from beginning to this point, and dropped a couple dozen comments on English usage problems. (I tried to avoid duplicating other people's finds, but a few got through.) But the only comments of mine that got released were the two above, on this page. Was I supposed to put the comments on the current page? I put all the comments on the page that they were relevant to, except for the one page that was comment-locked.
Hey Dan, Yeah sorry about that. For some reason your comments were moved to my spam folder in WordPress. Every now and then I check it and find someone like yourself who isn't trying to sell drugs on my blog. haha
I think the spam folder dumps everything every week so your old comments might have been trashed on accident. Sorry again. Another one of my loyal followers comments never get through for for some reason.
I forgot about the page that was locked too. I'll go unlock it now before I forget again.
Just so you know, I just sent all my pages to an editor that is going to address all the notes and make some of his own so hopefully before to long all the pages will be updated and all the editing can finally end.
I really appreciate you sticking with it even thought my blogs been giving you a hard time!
I think one thing that helps comments go though easier is if it has an email address attached to it that is a dependable source like gmail or something. Sometimes if there's no email, it questions if the comment is spam or not.
Everyone found all the typos I saw.
But I just wanted to say I just found this comic, and it is simply amazing. It's unlike most things I read. I love it.
Victuals is such a hard name to pronounce… it's like… 'vittles', right?
Yeah, That's how I say it. Just like the cat food. Tender Vittles.
"Victuals" is the origin (eye word) word of "vittles" which became an "ear word" (people learned it by hearing other people using it, rather than by reading it in print.) And like anything learned by ear, the pronunciation tends to drift. "Victuals" would be pronounced "VICK-chools" or "VICK-chu-alls" — I think you should continue to spell the name as "Victuals" because "Vittles" is too easily associated with the cat food "Tender Vittles" and I don't think you want to go there. "Victuals" gives the character a uniqueness and an identity of his own not associated with anything. I think that's what you're aiming at.
Also, thought you'd like to know, I found your GN by following a link from the voting page on TWC. I was voting for Fey Winds, saw the link, looked interesting and here I am. I love your artwork. It has an "ink on newsprint" look I like, like the classic comic book format — slick cover, newsprint pages. It also has a kind of water color feel to it too, which I find attractive. Seeing as how I have three kitties myself, a story with a cat in it catches my attention.
I was on the right track, the pets are being used as vessels for the lizards souls. I hope they are co-habitating…the pets have souls too you know…or did those souls “move on” so these souls could take over the bodies? I know, I’m getting deep;)