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reMIND
- the making of a graphic novel
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Noooo! That little figure that was there when his mom said that…was that the king or a messenger?
New reader from The Meek here.
I am wordless. Thanks, Der-shing, and thank you, Jason.
I'm super grateful for Der-shing plugging my comic. I'm glad you came to check it out! You are welcome!
It's 1.30 am I was just taking a look now I've finished the story…. I need more. This grabbed me and hasn't let got… I also came from the Meek like Il biggo.
Came here from The Meek — Der-shing commenting on the artwork of this immediately got my attention, and I can see why it featured first! There's a marvelous comic, storybook, artistic quality to the pages, without lacking in attention to detail. That said, the story is excellent thus far; the artwork could be lacking and the story would still hold my interest.
I'm glad you think the story is good. That has been my biggest struggle with this. I plan on having a professional writer help out with the final wording before it goes to print but to hear you say that it's good is really nice to hear.
This is some awesome stuff man!
You did ask for grammar whatever notes, so here's two things I noticed:
Pages 42-43:
"Some even said he would be king forever. That he's immortal!" – Dual tenses. You start in the past tense 'would be' and finish on the present 'he's' (he is).
I'd advise you change the first sentence to 'Some even say he will be king forever.'
Additionally "He stopped aging." – Aging, while found in TheSage, is an incorrect spelling. Should be amended to 'ageing'.
Spread 19:
"Alizarin Crimson was never the same." Should read 'Alizarin Crimson was never the same again."
It's ok in the current version, but is a touch abrupt and is technically an incomplete sentence.
Otherwise nothing stood out to me immediately. This is looking awesome! Keep it up!
Thank you thank you thank you! I can't say it enough. The fact that you guys are reading this even with the grammar and spelling errors is really great, but to take the time to politely point out suggestions is really helpful. I promise I am keeping track of all of these to make a major revision soon.
"“Some even said he would be king forever. That he’s immortal!” – Dual tenses. You start in the past tense ‘would be’ and finish on the present ‘he’s’ (he is)."
It's true that "said", "would be" and "he's" are different tenses, however this is not incorrect.
They "said" in the past, that he "would be" king in the future, and that "he's" currently immortal.
"Additionally “He stopped aging.” – Aging, while found in TheSage, is an incorrect spelling. Should be amended to ‘ageing’."
"aging" is correct, not "ageing". The "i" in "-ing" take the place of the silent "e" at the end of "age". Use a spell checker if you're not sure.
"“Alizarin Crimson was never the same.” Should read ‘Alizarin Crimson was never the same again.” "
This is a quote from a character. Whether it is correct grammar or not is irrelevant. Since it would be spoken, not written, spelling should be correct, but grammar should reflect the way the character actually speaks.
Aside from that, sticking "again" on the end does not make this sentence any more complete than it was without it.
Wow this is great to hear I have some of this correct in terms of grammar. Since, like you say, it's spoken and so it's irrelevant if it's correct or not. That makes sense.
I use a spellchecker in Photoshop and sometimes it's a bit limited in how it wants to correct words. But with all you said, it really helps me to think of this grammar issue in a whole new way. I really appreciate you taking the time to address this.
Actually "aging" and "ageing" are both correct spellings. "Aging" is the more common spelling in US English. The strip continues to be wonderful!
Another new reader from The Meek here, in awe of your work. Your artwork is beautiful, and the story is so intriguing and unique.
Hey, another The Meek reader.
I'm definitley subscribing to this. The art, the story, all of it is wonderful!
Also coming from The Meek.
Bookmarked, and I totally plan to buy a copy when you publish. Truly excellent stuff, you have some amazing talent.
I also came from the meek, And I am very impressed with what I see. I can't wait until the new pages are out <3
here from the meek, love this! Definitely a new regular reader!
Welcome everyone from The Meek! I'm super excited you found reMIND too!
Much love!
Came from the Meek ^^
Augh! I have to wait for more?! Already?! *bounces impatiently* How interesting!!!
Another reader from the Meek here!
Your art is amazing, the effort put into this is spectacular. I especially enjoy all the little details you put into the settings and backgrounds. I love the story, it's marvelous and has for certain captured my interest. I'm excited for the upcoming pages! <3
I'm also from The Meek!
I just read through your whole comic in about 15 minutes, and I am absolutely in awe! The art, the color palette, the format, the story– everything is stunning & perfect. I cannot wait for more!
For the record, I'm a Meeker too.
So glad Der-shing recommended you!
New reader, also directed here from The Meek. This is going straight to my bookmarks.
Your art is fabulous and original! Although I’m sad I got to the latest page so fast :(
Here’s hoping for lots of updates!
PS: can we have a wall with the cat? Especially when it’s making one of it’s “concentrated” faces? He cracks me up.
A wallpaper of Victuals? I don’t know why I haven’t offered one sooner. Thanks for the suggestion, I’ll try to get something up here soon.
Just as a wishlist, one of the best Victual faces is the last of the six panels in Spread 8 (the whole panel combination is great, but that last one is so cute).
Also, if I can make a humble ergonomic suggestion, if you cut 88 pixels out of the top banner and maybe place some simple buttons/links for "next/previous" etc. on the top menu bar (the one with "Links/Contact), everyone with at least 1024/1050 vertical resolution will be able to see the entire page and press next/previous easily, without having to scroll down on every spread.
Thanks for the suggestion. I see what you're saying about not wanting to scroll down for each page. I'll have to ask my IT guru if he can add some page buttons to the top. We were going to do that but it was a bit more tricky to code. Cutting 88 pixels from the top banner is doable though. I'll try to get on that soon. Thanks again!
Just followed a link from "the meek"- he wasn't kidding- this is great looking! nice story, well drafted, the lighting is amazing!!
oh my gosh love this so far
keep up the good work :)
Liking the story so far! Too short! Need more! BTW, spelling is important, but I wouldn’t worry too much about your grammar. I read through the story and while I wasn’t explicitly looking for errors, there was nothing that jumped out to me as awkward or that took me out of the story.
Glad this comic was recommended on The Meek.
Another reader of The Meek here. You have an incredible knack for composition and story-telling, and I really like your work. I already want to read more. So expect to see me haunting around your comments, being a grammar and spelling Nazi =P
Another nice page. I should have listened to you about having a buffer. I'm starting to get behind in my comic do to work and stuff. ;0