Thanks for the comment! I’m glad it’s holding up after voting for Phoenix Requiem. That’s a pretty amazing web comic. Feel free to vote for reMIND there too. I need all the help I can get for some exposure. Thanks again for stopping by and commenting.
I also stumbled upon this through Phoenix Requiem.
I feel addicted already.
I love the world you have that is so recognizable, yet so different. And the way you are weaving mystery into the story definitely has me checking back regularly.
Plus the art style is fantastic. Thanks for the comic and I look forward to seeing how it all unfolds.
Hey Thanks, Garthcp! It’s good to hear the advertising is paying off. I’m glad you are enjoying the mystery of the world I’ve been obsessing over. It’s about to take a sharp turn, so I hope it still grabs your attention. Thanks for the comment.
This is quite the lovely piece of work you’ve got going here. <3 I absolutely adore your use of soft colors and textures… And of course the story! I can't wait to see where this is going. You've given so much rich background info in just a few pages… <3
I’m glad you like the name, I switched it last minute before I started posting it online. Great comments like this are the reason I keep posting! Thanks again!
Love the style, love the imagination and love the love you put into this. There should be more stuff of this level of quality on the web (and there’s gonna be the way things are going but i’m ramblin). I am just curious as to how long is the GN gonna be? I kinda want it to go on. BTW, got to here through Whitechapel. CHeers and keep to that update schedule!
Hey there. I really appreciate your comment too! At this point I am just focusing on the first book which is about 130 pages (65 spreads). The full story is about 300 pages in which it will end. I guess I could keep going with it but I have a small collection of other stories that I want to tell too. I’m looked at reMIND as my learning curve into making graphic novels.
Putting it online was kinda a last ditch effort to try and get a few followers before I print so I don’t go straight to the poor house when nobody knows it exists. But now that I’ve been posting it online I can see that it’s taking a life of it’s own. I might have to take 6 months off between the first and second book just to get all caught back up again. I’ll still post things every week but we will see how fast I can get the second book up to speed.
You have a recurring punctuation problem called the “direct address comma” (DAC). In standard English punctuation, when you name or refer to the person you’re talking to in a way that the reference could be removed without changing the meaning (except that you aren’t saying who you’re talking to), then the name is separated from the rest of the statement by commas. There are three places on this spread where the DAC should be.
Thanks for showing me, Sonja (you include the DAC here)
Hey, Sonja, hope you don’t mind… (you left out one of the two DACs)
You got it, Sweetie! (You left out the DAC.)
The DAC is somewhat controversial, in that some authors omit it as a matter of style. This is discussed at copyediting.com. However, to some readers, the omission of DACs simply looks careless or uneducated. This is particularly a problem when you sometimes use the DAC, as in the first example on this page. This could be an example of the trailing-DAC style, where the DAC is only used when the direct address comes at the end of the sentence. This is somewhat reasonable, since that is where the comma can actually change the meaning of the sentence, as in this example from thewritingresource.net
Thanks for pointing this out, Dan, and making all the notes on pages. I just saw that you mentioned it throughout the pages linking to this comment. I’ll be referencing this comment as I try to edit my new pages from now on.
I probably wont get a new update in before it goes to print, mainly because it’s just too time consuming to fix, rescale, flatten, change to RGB and upload so many pages, but this is the thing that I really appreciate about this blog; I am learning so much stuff that I never would have otherwise. Thanks again for taking the time to explain this.
Just stumbled onto this after voting for Phoenix Requiem, you’ve got me interested and I love the art style.
Thanks for the comment! I’m glad it’s holding up after voting for Phoenix Requiem. That’s a pretty amazing web comic. Feel free to vote for reMIND there too. I need all the help I can get for some exposure. Thanks again for stopping by and commenting.
I also stumbled upon this through Phoenix Requiem.
I feel addicted already.
I love the world you have that is so recognizable, yet so different. And the way you are weaving mystery into the story definitely has me checking back regularly.
Plus the art style is fantastic. Thanks for the comic and I look forward to seeing how it all unfolds.
Cheers!
Hey Thanks, Garthcp! It’s good to hear the advertising is paying off. I’m glad you are enjoying the mystery of the world I’ve been obsessing over. It’s about to take a sharp turn, so I hope it still grabs your attention. Thanks for the comment.
This is quite the lovely piece of work you’ve got going here. <3 I absolutely adore your use of soft colors and textures… And of course the story! I can't wait to see where this is going. You've given so much rich background info in just a few pages… <3
Also, Victuals is an amazing name for a cat. :)
I’m glad you like the name, I switched it last minute before I started posting it online. Great comments like this are the reason I keep posting! Thanks again!
Love the style, love the imagination and love the love you put into this. There should be more stuff of this level of quality on the web (and there’s gonna be the way things are going but i’m ramblin). I am just curious as to how long is the GN gonna be? I kinda want it to go on. BTW, got to here through Whitechapel. CHeers and keep to that update schedule!
Hey there. I really appreciate your comment too! At this point I am just focusing on the first book which is about 130 pages (65 spreads). The full story is about 300 pages in which it will end. I guess I could keep going with it but I have a small collection of other stories that I want to tell too. I’m looked at reMIND as my learning curve into making graphic novels.
Putting it online was kinda a last ditch effort to try and get a few followers before I print so I don’t go straight to the poor house when nobody knows it exists. But now that I’ve been posting it online I can see that it’s taking a life of it’s own. I might have to take 6 months off between the first and second book just to get all caught back up again. I’ll still post things every week but we will see how fast I can get the second book up to speed.
Anyway, thanks again!
Just stumbled onto this from an advert, have to say it’s looking pretty interesting so far :D
Thanks Calaros! I’m glad you found it! And thanks for the comment!
You have a recurring punctuation problem called the “direct address comma” (DAC). In standard English punctuation, when you name or refer to the person you’re talking to in a way that the reference could be removed without changing the meaning (except that you aren’t saying who you’re talking to), then the name is separated from the rest of the statement by commas. There are three places on this spread where the DAC should be.
The DAC is somewhat controversial, in that some authors omit it as a matter of style. This is discussed at copyediting.com. However, to some readers, the omission of DACs simply looks careless or uneducated. This is particularly a problem when you sometimes use the DAC, as in the first example on this page. This could be an example of the trailing-DAC style, where the DAC is only used when the direct address comes at the end of the sentence. This is somewhat reasonable, since that is where the comma can actually change the meaning of the sentence, as in this example from thewritingresource.net
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So my advice is to use the DAC throughout, but I can appreciate the argument for leaving out the DAC or using only the trailing DAC.
Thanks for pointing this out, Dan, and making all the notes on pages. I just saw that you mentioned it throughout the pages linking to this comment. I’ll be referencing this comment as I try to edit my new pages from now on.
I probably wont get a new update in before it goes to print, mainly because it’s just too time consuming to fix, rescale, flatten, change to RGB and upload so many pages, but this is the thing that I really appreciate about this blog; I am learning so much stuff that I never would have otherwise. Thanks again for taking the time to explain this.
I missed another DAC in “…not at all, Earl”