Agreed. The statement when Victuals goes missing seems to be from the narrator, and if the narrator is not fully informed – knowing the end of the story – there had better be a very good reason and a major narrative break. This has not occurred. Unless this is NOT Victuals – zombie, mind-controlled, robot, whatnot – that first wording has to change.
i don’t see why the narrator HAS to be omniscient. i’m fine with a narrator who doesn’t know that’s going to happen before it happens. i think that the artist has the freedom to decide what kind of narration he wants to use to tell his story.
I agree that the narrator doesn’t have to be omniscient, but if they’re telling the story from the present they wouldn’t say, “and I never saw it again.” You don’t lose your car keys and immediately say “and I never saw them again.” If the narrator is telling the story after the facts then the statement is a contradiction. It kind of bugs me too.
Okay, as I read a bit further in. I start to wish I hadn’t been so quick to be cynical. The author may have very purposefully used the words he used. I need to have more faith!
FIRST COMMENT hey look THERE is where the cat went
I LOVE the colours in your artwork! :)
Thanks!!!
You can’t say she “never saw the cat again” in the earlier spread, then have kitty show up in this one. Maybe “She never thought-”
Agreed. The statement when Victuals goes missing seems to be from the narrator, and if the narrator is not fully informed – knowing the end of the story – there had better be a very good reason and a major narrative break. This has not occurred. Unless this is NOT Victuals – zombie, mind-controlled, robot, whatnot – that first wording has to change.
Oh, yeah, and I think the artwork’s great, too.
i don’t see why the narrator HAS to be omniscient. i’m fine with a narrator who doesn’t know that’s going to happen before it happens. i think that the artist has the freedom to decide what kind of narration he wants to use to tell his story.
I agree that the narrator doesn’t have to be omniscient, but if they’re telling the story from the present they wouldn’t say, “and I never saw it again.” You don’t lose your car keys and immediately say “and I never saw them again.” If the narrator is telling the story after the facts then the statement is a contradiction. It kind of bugs me too.
Okay, as I read a bit further in. I start to wish I hadn’t been so quick to be cynical. The author may have very purposefully used the words he used. I need to have more faith!