Quick editing note — “paying me a heafty penny” — “hefty” is misspelled. I only point it out because you asked me to. :)
Thanks I just made the change and will be uploading it today!
Yarp, should be “hefty,” though I find the wording a little clunky. Is she supposed to be mixing metaphors?
Your drawings are lovely! Also, there ought to be a comma in “Why, Dad?”
If she’s asking her Dad, “Why, Dad?” then there should be a direct address comma there.
But if she’s asking herself why her father is one of the ones that disappeared, then “Why Dad?” is correct.
Gravestone is one word.
Why does the gravestone say 1904-20–? Was her father a hundred when he died? Wouldn’t that make him 80 when she was born?
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Quick editing note — “paying me a heafty penny” — “hefty” is misspelled. I only point it out because you asked me to. :)
Thanks I just made the change and will be uploading it today!
Yarp, should be “hefty,” though I find the wording a little clunky. Is she supposed to be mixing metaphors?
Your drawings are lovely!
Also, there ought to be a comma in “Why, Dad?”
If she’s asking her Dad, “Why, Dad?” then there should be a direct address comma there.
But if she’s asking herself why her father is one of the ones that disappeared, then “Why Dad?” is correct.
Gravestone is one word.
Why does the gravestone say 1904-20–? Was her father a hundred when he died? Wouldn’t that make him 80 when she was born?