Another nice page layout. The transition of shots are particularly nice because of how the character's pose helps to establish the mood. Very nice story telling here, it's rare to see effective use of a three pannel layout, especially in American comics where all the pages are so filled with information.
Yarp, should be "hefty," though I find the wording a little clunky. Is she supposed to be mixing metaphors?
Quick editing note — “paying me a heafty penny” — “hefty” is misspelled. I only point it out because you asked me to. :)
Thanks I just made the change and will be uploading it today!
Your drawings are lovely!
Also, there ought to be a comma in "Why, Dad?"
If she’s asking her Dad, “Why, Dad?” then there should be a direct address comma there.
But if she’s asking herself why her father is one of the ones that disappeared, then “Why Dad?” is correct.
Gravestone is one word.
Why does the gravestone say 1904-20–? Was her father a hundred when he died? Wouldn't that make him 80 when she was born?
I think the phrase is "pretty penny," but that's usually for something costing you a "pretty penny."
Anyway, those two highly important words aside, I love the drawings and am excited to keep reading
Another nice page layout. The transition of shots are particularly nice because of how the character's pose helps to establish the mood. Very nice story telling here, it's rare to see effective use of a three pannel layout, especially in American comics where all the pages are so filled with information.
I think it should be “If it weren’t for” instead of wasn’t; it’s subjunctive.