yo, i really like the atmospheric qualities in your art.. like sunshine and distance…
i want to make a graphic novel like this one day, but for now i'm just writing my story ideas out to perfection…
the grammar is just off in the bubble above the cat posters. You used past and present tense there. Can't do that but not sure how to fix it (Grammar sucks too and spelling). Maybe. "I started to run out of ideas, so i broke down, and began to post some signs around town" or keep the posted and on part. All i know is that it really isn't right.
on that note love the art!
I kinda like the dialogue in that bubble the way it is. It's not correct, but it's the way people talk – which suits for narration, I reckon.
I don't agree with the previous grammar note (she could still be actively running out of ideas when she broke, so the tenses don't clash), but I'd reposition the punctuation in the last speech bubble:
From "My cat … I mean." to "…My cat, I mean."
If you contract "them" to "em" you should use an apostrophe: 'em
Another note on the grammer for the cat posters box. I'd say that if you change from "I finally broke" to "I've finally broke", you can keep the style just as casual but make it work a little better. It's just a little jarring when you read something and it's close but not quite. I don't think you'd lose anything by switching to "I've". Hope that helps.
Love this page by the way!
I personally think it sounds better without changing it to “I’ve”
Oh how embarrassing, I've written a note about grammar … and spelt grammar wrong.
*hangs head in shame*
That's a universal law of corrections: when you correct someone's English, you make a mistake in your own English. I try not to let it bother me, but it's tough.
There should be a direct address comma in "Morning, Sonja".
This universe kind of totally seems absolutely awesome. Must find out more.
PS: on Eddie’s meat cart, replace “organicly” with “organically”, if possible. :)
I’ve just been skimming through the story, but the art is absolutely first rate! I’m subscribing!
Lizard man or not, that many missing pets isn’t a good sign:(
Pretty good translation job. most important thing is to make sure the meaning of what you are saying comes across. I don’t see that as much of a problem, your writing’s been fairly straight forward.
if he’s willing to do it, why not?
i think the poster should read ” contact Sonja at the lighthouse if found” it flows better and better illustrates your meaning… i think. and i agree with the first comment the atmosphere is absolutely remarkable! and has anyone else notices all the other missing pet posters? for shadowing! duh duh duh DUHHHHH
The watercolors and art in this story ARE SO FREAKING BEAUTIFUL!!!
Just visited this site from getting an endorsement from RATFIST and EARTHWORM JIM creator Doug TeNapel.
Wow. Heckuva way to make a first impression.
Very impressive spread. Me likes.
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